Lesson:
Today we worked on fine tuning our rough drafts. See below for some tips for your final draft. You must show revisions for your final draft.
Weak verbs drive weak sentences
Get rid of:
be being is am are was were
Use brushstrokes…
Paint with participles
• The player dribbled through the defense to make the winning basket.
• Slicing and dicing, the player dribbled through the defense to make the winning basket.
Paint with absolutes (a two-word combination--a noun and an ing or ed ending verb.
• The surfer braved the cold water.
• Lips trembling, knees knocking, the surfer braved the cold water.
Paint with appositives (a noun that adds a second meaning to the preceding noun).
• John surprisingly voted for the Republican candidate.
• John, a democrat, surprisingly voted for the Republican candidate.
Paint with adjectives shifted out of order
• The sleek, long red automobile was beautiful.
• The red automobile, sleek and long, was beautiful.
Practice
_____________, I drove my car to the beach.
_____________, I drove my car to the beach
_____________, I drove my car to the beach
I drove my car,_____________, to the beach.
I drove my car, _____________, to the beach.
I drove my car, _____________, to the beach.
I drove my car to the beach, _____________.
I drove my car to the beach, _____________.
I drove my car to the beach, _____________.
HMWK:
Final Draft
Read to page 297 for extra credit
